*poof*
Friday, August 6, 2010
Poetry Bomb
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Paul Ilechko
Blood Blossoms What kind of blooms are these which linger into early winter survive so many nights of freezing temperature still thriving in...
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Probably everyone knows this poem and this book very well. Kinnell isn't exactly invisible in the poetry world. I loved this poem and th... -
Line by line retranslation of Ashbery Waiting makes time democratic, you just said so Then a white horse ran by, repeatedly running back a... -
An Affair on Lombardy Street The landlocked Airbnb has a nautical theme and an irregularly shaped board nailed to one wall that might work i...
Nice bomb although I suspect the eventual explosion to be mild and quickly doused with mist. If the world was filled with fathers like you, my, what a better place it would be.
ReplyDeleteFrom a technical perspective I think, at least from my reading, that the 'unfortunately' in the last two stanzas do not do the work that you intended, unless you intended the ambiguity. You wanted to mean that it is unfortunate that is was necessary to teach that lesson, right, not that it was unfortunate that you did? The quick fix 'I have had to..' breaks the repetition though, unfortunately. ;-)
Again, beautiful writing. Bravo!
I think you're right. When I recast it's probably going to be a couple stanzas longer, as I've had some ideas since writing it. I wanted the ambiguity at first, now I'm not so sure. Thanks Gerry!
ReplyDeletenot sure i understand the bomb idea but i love this, especially the last line
ReplyDeleteWell, I sort of thought it was a weakish poem that I could improve later, ergo poetry-bomb. I'm glad you like it though!
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