Monday, November 1, 2010

New Poem Draft





It'll disappear in a few days, but it's the first one in a while, so I thought I'd post it. I'll slowly be working on poems every day this month.



*poof*

3 comments:

  1. Lots of great lines, Rusty, I especially liked "...600 years off the bow..." and "...the delicatessen in the waves..."

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  2. This works. Big time. That image of the fired cannon and how it applies to this overall. And the word choices and how each builds to the next. His holy crown. Primordial like first sex. This wins, Rusty.

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